


The Girl With the beautiful Voice
Once upon a time there was a beautiful girl named Lorelei whom had a beautiful voice. Lorelei lived in the village of Chaka, located in the high mountains Of Colombia.
Lorelei was born in the early season of summer, making her a very special baby. She was no normal girl, Lorelei was born with the power to heal anything she touches and she was born with a beautiful voice. Being only 15 years old, she had healed so many people from her village. She was so busy that she hardly had any free time to be a normal teenager.
A couple of months later she decided to leave her village and go explore the world on which she lived on. She explored from Italy, France, Greece, Swiss, and even Belgium.
Lorelei stayed in Belgium to live there. Through out the five years in which she lived there she explored every mountain, every village, sang threw out the country. At one stop that she made a young man by the name of Maurizio fell completely in love with Lorelei’s voice to an extreme in which he wanted to marry her. She did not know what to do when Maurizio proposed to her. Her words were “I’m sorry but I have no clue in what I should do”. That didn’t change his mind he was still certain to marry her.
Lorelei was later faced with the challenge of healing an old man who was really sick. Lorelei had to heal him for the reason that if she did not she wouldnt be able to go back to her hometown. A couple of days after, the old man was healed and the village thanked Lorelei with a great feast.
Lorelei eventually returned to her hometown village Chaka. The night that she arrived, while eating dinner with her family; her mother brought up the conversation of marriage. Lorelei astonished by the fact that her mother was pressuring her to get married, grabbed all belongings and left the house. She stopped in the woods and just sat there and cried, cried of anger, and cried of loneliness.At that moment of weakness she heard something beautiful in the distant woods. She walked and walked and followed the sound until she stopped and was jaw dropped by the person whom she saw singing.
Shaking her head and saying “no it cannot be, WHY is he here?” She quickly ran out of the woods, when suddenly the person who was singing came behind her and asked what was wrong. To the persons surprise it was Lorelei, whom he grabbed. Lorelei vexed at the fact he sought out to get her said “Maurizio what are you doing here”
Maurizio spoke only to leave Lorelei with her mouth open. She, at that instance, realized how much she had liked Maurizio . In her mind she was replaying the instances and scenes in which Maurizio and she were together. Telling herself “how could I have missed it? He was always there since the beginning” She then told Maurizio that she would accept to marry him.
Jumping of joy , Maurizio quickly said we will get married as soon as we can. Lorelei quickly went home and told her mother the news, the whole village was soon all getting ready for the news of this.
The next day there was a beautiful wedding in the village of Chaka. Maurizio and Lorelei lived to be forever happy.
I really like the story, it was elegant and interesting. I didn't get bored, I wanted to read more. There should be a Part Two, when they have kids and some or one may have powers. I also love the vocabulary, it was AWESOME! Great Story!
ReplyDeleteI really like the story, it was elegant and interesting. I didn't get bored, I wanted to read more. There should be a Part Two, when they have kids and some or one may have powers. I also love the vocabulary, it was AWESOME! Great Story!
ReplyDeleteThis Story Was Very interesting And it Made me get more into it as Jasmine Said The Vocab Was Spot On and It was A Great Story
ReplyDeleteIt starts off very interesting wherer she lives and where she was born. {(which i like:)} This story is like an urben legend like the Yetie. This story makes me feel like this actully happened. I am enlighten from this story. Keep up the good work.
ReplyDeleteThis story is great i agree with jasmine there should be a part two and i can tell this is a myth because of the way you started the story with once upon a time .
ReplyDeletethis is good i also agree with jasmine and thats good that your this young writing this good and its also good that it doesnt remind me of a folktale or a fairy tale thumbs up to your myth
ReplyDeleteyour story was great i didnt get bored and it started like a real myth making it like a real story. great story carmen
ReplyDeletei really liked your story it was very good i didnt fall asleep soo that was a good thing but wat is the moral ? you also had lots of vocabs and it was very good over all but my story was better !
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